Re: i Need someone's opinion
Reply #3 –
G'day Christian,
Motorik
The poor bass player, almost no relief from that constant riff
Just kiddin..
Without knowing whether you're wanting a visual or audio critique I have to guess...
The long "hairpins" at the start and finish - I think I would use cresc. and decresc. directives here. The long hairpin is visually somewhat distracting even if it is unambiguous (written {de}cresc. directives can be ambiguous unless you are diligent about other dynamic markings)
Ths bass riff is very effective and I like the way it is picked up by the Charang at bar 62. However it becomes a bit monotonous for my tastes, but that is my tastes and shouldn't be considered an applicable comment for everyone else.
I found some of the panning early in the piece a bit abrupt - This could easily be deliberate so I only mention it in passing.
An interesting work but not quite my "cup of tea" (I'm biased, I like Big Band Jazz/Swing over just about everything with the exception of some of the modern Gospel we do at church)
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Again, very effective bass riff's (I appreciated the change at bar 31) but again they became a little monotonous for my tastes. Just dif'rent strokes for dif'rent folks, please don't take it as a specific criticism, I know there are plenty of people who like exactly that form.
I did like the way different instruments came and went, along with the vocal line. Added some nice variety.
Visually, dynamic markings, "hairpins", tempo marks etc. could be better placed. Try to avoid having things cross over each other, it makes 'em hard to find/see. Tempo markes especially should be outside the staff. Thes things are important if anyone is going to read the score.
I think that for their target audience they will be well received.
Lawrie's AUD $0.02.